its been 7 hours since the death of my master norrisstar was killed (9 times to be exact) by pantherstar. he died a heros death. his last words were the oak tree. and then pantherstar umm.... ill leave it at there was alot of fur and other stuff on the ground. well after that i ran clanless leaderless and possibley confused. what was the oak tree and what did it have to do with anything? the answer would come later know i felt as if i was being wacthed and BAM!!!
Chapter2 i was hit and bleeding i started to hear maniacle laughs all around me then it happened again. BAM!!!! this time i seen it. 'windclaw' i screamed nothing.I scremed again. why werent my powers working? suddenly BAM!!!! this time a huge wind hit the figure and some ghostly thing came out of him. i was dizzy but could still tell he ws an odd cat his paw like that of a bat and then darkness all i saw was darkness. i heard voices were they real "hes awaking hurry must get him to the clan soon"! CHAPTER 3 riverclan
ps windclaw is one of my special powers i.e.(wateba dat means) read norristar
None of this makes any sense whatsoever. Could you actually explain whats going on and seperate it into different sentences so it makes sense and not clammor it all together.
simpleton version i alone. i witnised leader bein killed lots of guts on ground from pantherstar killing him. me walk into forest recalls norristars dieing words then feeel like bin watched
And you can barely understand what he's talking about. if i taked lik his would you undertand me two well i don't tink so becaue his is how secretpaw taks and dis is tree sentences but of coure you cant tell
chapter 3:riverclan ps if i make a mistake sorry "hes awaking hurry move" ! "Huh" i said. "who said that where am I" ? "youre in riverclan a loud" voice said."I am the leader Pantherstar'! 'thank you for saving m... ".i could feel pressure on my chest as pantherstar claws sunk into me. "I only allowed you here just so i could do the same thing i did to youre leader you windclan scum"!! my heart raced i tried to react but pantherstar had me pined . I thought i wasnt going to make until a voisce said stop. still dazed and unable to see i did not know who it was.
Oh so now I save you? And you got that chapter 4 title from Batman Returns. "Who's the man behind the bat? Maybe you can help me find the woman behind the cat." P-lease. And could you at least put the quotation marks, or these " " if you don't know what I mean so we know if someone's talking? Yes, I'm a harsh critic I kno, and what the heck am I doing in Riverclan territory? (That is me who said "Stop" isn't it?) By the way, I'm not criticising you for the Batman thing, just the other stuff. After all, I get some of my inspiration from Batman, I mean come on! Those stories are awesome!
the voice came from the same cat in the woods. "why should i stop he is obviosly from windclan". he sniffed me and looked at the other. "cat why do you show intrest in him" pantherstar said.he replied. "I understad hes windclan and that he looks a bit plump". "HEY! im right here and his happens ta be fur!!" "Shut up kyle" pantherstar replied. "any way he also savd my life in the woods." "fine ill let him live but hes in youre paws".With that pantherstar droped me an left. "Hi im batpaw". "umm im s-s-secretpaw". "umm thank you but if i may ask whats wrong with youre paws". he looked down and said "its a birth mark ok". "well i guess all be going". i got up until batpaw said "can i come "." sorry i have to do this alone". "ok" he said and walked away dissapointed. chapter 5 the journey begins ps this takes place before batpaw becomes batclaw.
After resting in riverclan i sent out on my journey. batclaw informed me that the only oak tree he knew about is 4trees where cats gather aavaery full moon. i think thats what norrisstar was trying to tell me i guess. then i heard a rustle in the bushes. i turned getting ready to pounce when a firmiliar form was running saying "kkkkkkkkkkiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnnn!!!!". it was batclaw "I thought told you not to come".i hissed. "well i was so bored and didnt feel like going back to my clan just yet so this was the only thing that seemed fun"."please can i come" he mewed. "oh alright i was getting kinda lonley just dont do that whole kin thing ok". alright
o.0 Yeah, this is weird. Okay, I wrote a new chapter.
Irispaw was walking, but then she, the pretty one, saw blood, because Batpaw killed Secretpaw. Pantherstar ran in and attacked Batpaw for killing Secretpaw. "Why you little~ I WANTED TO KILL HIM!!!!!!!!!!!!" Then he was a zombie and Pantherstar re-killed secretpaw. The end of my 'if only' chapter of this fan-fic.
Chapter 6 me and batpaw cotnued are journey across a suden gorge.when i smelled the smell of a she cat. seemed like she was from thunderclan! i turned to my left and asked batpaw does he smell any thing."yes.i actualy do it smells like a thunderclan cat"!*crunch* we turned to see a young cat probaly about 12 moons old .she stared and said "hiya"."My Names irispaw. "whatcha doin?" "umm where kinda on a misson here and".... i hissed at batpaw. "dont tell her." "well sorry". "can i come?" me and batpaw hudeled together as we threw around yeses and nos till we agreed."fine we got nothing to loose" i said.she rolled on her back and said yeah!!"
on the day of the full moon we reached four trees. only to find it deserted. "maybe thtere late"sugested irispaw. "No. i replied."then where are they?" batpaw asked. (AS IF I KNEW.) then red light shown down on us i looked up it was a lunar eclipse. "Of corse, there not here no one goes here on a lunar eclipse.shouted irispaw. Then out of the corner of my eye i saw the light of the lunar eclipse shine on the ground as something began to sparkle. I ran to it to find an odd rock, as i picked it upthe lunar light went throught it marking a spot on one of the trees . "whats it shining on?". batpaw asked.
"Hey look at those markings", batpaw mewed. "yeah they look old." is said "Can you read this? ". "I can". replied irispaw . after waiting and waiting..... "I got it!" she said. "it says this: "a night will come when 4 will fall,the stone of 9 will take many,cats will turn as light turns into blood and a never ending nightmare shall fall upon the land". "as this day comes 1 will come with the power of the winds only to lose his own life". "Creepy", hey secretpaw this cat looks like you". i turned to look at the other side of the chamber of 4 trees to see batpaw pointing at the prophecy thing. it does look like me!
This couldnt be my future. I thought. "Irispaw please say theres more,something that says this can all be avoided". Grimly she replied, "Im so sorry but....no". Then i felt dissy and everything went blank.
Then i saw four cats coming over the horizon only to fall and separate. There pace got faster and faster till nother cat showed up and pushed them into a pit onlyobe saved by an odd cat.But then the sun tuyrned red and i awoke. I know what i must do.
"Secretpaw wake up"! "Huh what where who "! Its morning batpaw mewed softly. "Guys I need to ask you to do something,go to youre clans and try to pursaude them to come to four trees. "Why". irispaw asked "Please dont ask its just important ok." "alright". batpaw said.
